Board Thread:Questions and Answers/@comment-31181127-20191027231013/@comment-31181127-20191111233916

Fireball222 wrote: How bout Jake lol.

About: His mother killed by a scout demon during the first demon invasion, he grew up as a looter on the streets. Learning how to kill low level demons and how to avoid higher ones at an early age. He gained fighting skills, and obtained his golden satchel from a high level demon he killed with a pipe bomb. He was recruited into the D.S.O, though was almost court martialed because he attemped to rescue a group of survivors that were killed by scout demons. He has risen up the ranks and has almost been promoted to lieutenant.

Appearance: look up Sgt. Kelly Eldridge from State of Decay and that is Jake's outfit, Look at Jakes page for more details.

Abilities: Parkour

Can kill things with his bare hands

Unhinged

Weaponry skills, specifically with guns.

Quite strong

Perceptive

Agile

Soul Grab (he mastered this in the D.S.O, he pulls a soul out of a body very quickly, damging it irreparribly.)

Threat level: 16/20

Items:

Golden satchel.

For more look on Jakes page.

Transformations:

(he cant go super or dark)

Look for hardcore on jakes page.

Techniques:

Curb stomp: exacly what you think it is.

Run/Gun: exactly what you think it is.

Utilizing his enviornment.

Ability type: Technique

Division: Military.

Strength: Muscular.

Speed: Processing: Very Fast  Speed: Average

Durability: Very High

Fighting style: enviornmental/weaponry.

Feats: (you can decide lol)

Weaknesses: Mentally Unstable, Heart Problems, not very fast compared to other characters.

Theme: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9imCm6CrNZ8&list=RDMM6uN3dxJRnss&index=11 This is good, but i feel it's a bit lacking in some areas; primarily the stats. Defining strength as muscular doesn't tell me much in terms of how strong he is; for all i know, he's only as strong as a human, which would make him as weak as an insect compared to the lowest level demon. That's being generous by the way. So a bit more context would help a lot. Speaking of context, I recommend looking up the pages Demons and Chaos Energy Levels; they should help in this regard. I feel that you're referrencing the chaos energy levels when you mentioned his "threat level: 16/20", hence why I linked it. If that is indeed the case, it would be better if you formatted it as "level 16" or something like that.

Also when listing his abilities I'd like to suggest that you pay a visit to the superpowers wiki; trust me when i say it helps. For example: instead of listing parkour and agile as seperate abilities, use Enhanced Agility as an umbrella term and define how this ability applies to Jake in two or three sentences. Something like "because of his high agility, Jake can maneuver around using parkour." or something similar.