Talk:Red the Hedgehog/@comment-2081000-20130820184112

Hello Red! I'm here to give your character some constructive criticism! It says in the rules that i'm allowed to do this so i'm going to go through each section and comment on the good things and what needs to be improved.

First Glance
Here's the first problem. He looks like Sonic. I am sure you've heard this time and time again from other people but you really should sort this out.

Information
The first problem I can see is that he's related to sonic, that's usually cliche route to start and I think that Red could stand well as a character without being sonic's bro.

His Immediate Family is fine though, I mean i might review them at another time but yeah, they don't look bad.

And I think that he should be called Zach or Zachary like his real name is. I mean I don't think i'd appreciate being called the colour that i actually am.

Backstory
I'll skip this for now because it's unfinished. But i think that while it's more original than just being brothers with Sonic it is still cliche.

Relationships
I err, think this is very detailed but I do question the amount of potential love interests.

Future
He retires at 28? That is really not old at all, especially since the normal age is 67, with the early being 62 ish.

And also, since he was working with a bunch of agencies like GUN, i'm pretty sure that there would be a lot of people who would still be after him.

As well as this he becomes an actor and musician? I'm guessing he would need some body guards at least to keep an eye out, he definitely needs some protection, doesn't matter how good of a fighter he imay be.

Red's Tourettes syndrome
I can't really say much for this since i don't completely understand Tourettes. Just looking it up though i think you've got it right (don't take my word for this)

Conclusion
Overall I think that you should change his design and remove his relation to sonic (Because I think he can stand well without being sonic's brother)

I also think that you should change his backstory so it flows better with the rest of his life? if you know what i'm saying?

This is a work in progress and i don't know the last time you edited this so you might already have different ideas for him.

Thank you for your time if you did read this and I hope you don't take this personally.