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TheRealDylanator wrote: Titanium562 wrote: TheRealDylanator wrote: Chapter 1.

The 13th line is missing a him before a comma.

The 26th line is missing Eggman after present.

Apart from that its great! Ohhhhhh. But thanks! By the way, please can I have Jacob Laysedi's personality. :3 IT'S NOT ON THE PAGE O_O.

Oooooooooooops It's ok. It would be nice if I had something to work with though.

Plus I tried to edit the fanfiction, but I couldn't find the 13th line problem... could you maybe quote the fanfiction so I can find it?