Talk:Raven the Cyberhog/@comment-4107522-20181109230919

~The Appearance section says he’s 36 pounds, but the Weight section says 45-48.

~A lot of good detail with appearance and side-bar info. It looks like you thought this character through.

~I see you’ve balanced the powers with the weaknesses associated. To make it easier to pick out the weaknesses in that part vs. the powers, I’d suggest making a sub-header for each of those to put the weaknesses.

~Additionally, some of the abilities are a bit vague on their maximum limits of usage: like the range or general size of powers, as well as how much power on a technical level is required. If some of those could be given numbers, please do so.

~I like that you put some depth into why and how the gender-switching works. My only critique is how necessary it is. If this happens to Raven often, then it makes sense to keep it, but if it’s more so just a joke power that doesn’t influence anything, it might not be. It’s up to you of course.

~You did a good job making his abilities as a whole balanced, particularly with the Weaknesses section. Nothing else to say there. You just did a good job.

Summary: A very well-thought-out character in general. I don’t see too much in current adventures to add to his backstory, but I’d imagine that’d be something put later on as you think up plots and interact with other people. The powers are well-balanced, though some of the specifics are hard to pin-point. The art-work is serviceable in giving us a view of the character.

I think the opening quote for him is a bit over-the-top but not horrible. I don’t see much in his profile to match up with how hostile he gets about trust there though.

If I had to say anything needed particular work it would be the backstory, as it’s rather brief. It would help with the connect of the rest of the profile.