Thread:Carefulspoon/@comment-4034733-20120330205602/@comment-4034733-20120418232945

it's cool dude I just thought it was a little unfair how ivy made red look like a criminal I was shown what happend during that chat she was just as bad in my opinion. (plus the reason red lost is ivy had admin power over him. "which again to me is a little unfair") but oh well what's done is done. It doesn't really concern me so I just stay out of it. I tried to defend red she wouldn't hear it okay I'm done. (arguging that is) Anway off that subject I really don't know how you could tack any different I mean it's a straight forward character which is good. If I would make a change give her more basic information (friends,family,age,likes,dislikes, etc.) so that way the reader can learn more about the character. And that's all I would suggest. oh by the way I made into the depths and I was wonderign if I could get som feedback on it? It's only the first two chapters so don't expect anything interesting =/