Talk:Judas the wolf (ユダウォルフ)/@comment-2081000-20130826111942

Hello Onup! I see you sent me a message asking me to review your character so I will have a go.

Info
I do question his age a little since i think that he's a bit young compared to all the things he's does.

The rest of the section seems to be good though. I do like Judas's design.

Swords
I do wonder if he really needs the katana, but i'm guessing he had gotten that before he found the black sword?

And (if you haven't) maybe the powers he gets from the sword are unlocked over time? For example when he first gets the sword, he can only use a selection of powers but as he gets more powerful over time then Kokurai allows him to use more powers? Just a suggestion.

Abilities
I'm going to put this for all the ability sections because the major concern is that there aren't many weaknesses that i can see that balance him out. Maybe like with his lightning abilities he feels drained if he uses them a lot.

Alternate Forms
I like that in the Neo Star Form, there is a time limit, so it's like a short boost.

Does he need the use of the emeralds in his forms though? I mean the emeralds aren't going to be around a lot. Maybe in the Necro Star Form instead of the use of the emerald, it's how well Judas is at the time? Maybe the more injured he gets, the less control he has?

Personality
I think you should move this higher up on the page, but other that that i like Judas's personality, it is quite detailed.

Backstory
I'm not really sure about the backstory because the parents being killed and being sent to an orphanage is a bit cliche, and if they were living on a mountain wouldn't the war not really effect them as much? What was the war even about?

And did all his friends from the slums have to be killed? What happens with Varanus? I'm guessing if Varanus survived then Judas would be trying to hunt them down.

Conclusion
Overall, I think that he's an interesting character. He does seem a little overpowered in places but i think that can be easily solved by giving him some flaws in some of his powers he uses.

His backstory needs a bit of work, maybe tweaked a bit and have some more detail? Maybe if you wanted to could write a story of his backstory. I'd read it if you did.