Talk:Unfortunate: Upside Down/Part One/@comment-4107522-20190115160154

This reads like an epilogue, which isn't bad when one knows the whole story beforehand. Unfortunately that means a lot of people are going to be very lost in keeping up with all the mentions of past events. It's like having a big post-adventure chapter where everyone's just reflecting on the whole story that just happened, but in this case, it's a story we didn't see.

That doesn't make this poorly-written, but it is by default dependent on previous events. If I were to suggest how to make it easier to keep up with, I'd advise to either limit the callbacks, OR more preferably, have little markers at each call back, with a brief summary at the bottom of the story explaining each.

The characters are well-narrated and described, and I wasn't really lost on which was which. It's just that there's clearly a lot of history in here, and for those who didn't experience it, it's difficult to keep up with.